Biased Article: http://www.weeklystandard.com/blogs/what-do-palestinians-want_1058143.html
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The so called "Palestinian terror attacks" on Israel are not as chaotic as they seem considering the fact that Israeli Forces have killed 9 times more CIVILIANS in the past decade than Palestinians have towards Israelis. Fox News needs to re-think their definition of "terror". It is also hard to believe that Palestinians are the terrorists when in-reality Israel where the ones to invade Palestinian land in the first place.
Palestine has been under constant siege from Israel since 1948, Palestinians are finding it very hard to re-grow their economy with the everlasting blockade and restrictions on imports and exports making Palestine the 126th out of the 180 ranked economies by Nominal GDP. It is estimated that sometime during the next 5 years Palestine's economy will take a giant collapse leading to an appalling famine which will inevitably lead to the demise of hundreds if not thousands of Palestinians living in Gaza.
Let's not forget the phosphorus infused bombs dropped over Palestine in the summer of 2009, this wasn't the first time Israel were accused of using prohibited weapons towards civilian-crowded areas in Gaza it was believed that they used the same weapon during their failed skirmish to take over Lebanon in 2006, and it was later confirmed to be true by a team of Italian scientists who took soil samples in Lebanon. These bombs killed about 900 Palestinians and injured 4,000 Palestinians, A UN report estimated that about half of the these numbers were civilians and half of those civilians were women and children.
According to United Nations estimates about 1,000,000 Palestinians live without electricity and about 750,000 are without clean water, this number was further enhanced because the white phosphoric bombs damaged major sources of water in Palestine as this toxic material was able to seep underground and mix with primary water reserves under-ground.
All in all, people who listen to FOX news need to stop and re-think their definition of terrorism when it comes to the Israeli-Palestinian conflict because the numbers and facts speak for themselves, and not the unsupported claims made by FOX news on the matter.
(Website funded and backed by FOX news.)
Re-written:
The so called "Palestinian terror attacks" on Israel are not as chaotic as they seem considering the fact that Israeli Forces have killed 9 times more CIVILIANS in the past decade than Palestinians have towards Israelis. Fox News needs to re-think their definition of "terror". It is also hard to believe that Palestinians are the terrorists when in-reality Israel where the ones to invade Palestinian land in the first place.
Palestine has been under constant siege from Israel since 1948, Palestinians are finding it very hard to re-grow their economy with the everlasting blockade and restrictions on imports and exports making Palestine the 126th out of the 180 ranked economies by Nominal GDP. It is estimated that sometime during the next 5 years Palestine's economy will take a giant collapse leading to an appalling famine which will inevitably lead to the demise of hundreds if not thousands of Palestinians living in Gaza.
Let's not forget the phosphorus infused bombs dropped over Palestine in the summer of 2009, this wasn't the first time Israel were accused of using prohibited weapons towards civilian-crowded areas in Gaza it was believed that they used the same weapon during their failed skirmish to take over Lebanon in 2006, and it was later confirmed to be true by a team of Italian scientists who took soil samples in Lebanon. These bombs killed about 900 Palestinians and injured 4,000 Palestinians, A UN report estimated that about half of the these numbers were civilians and half of those civilians were women and children.
According to United Nations estimates about 1,000,000 Palestinians live without electricity and about 750,000 are without clean water, this number was further enhanced because the white phosphoric bombs damaged major sources of water in Palestine as this toxic material was able to seep underground and mix with primary water reserves under-ground.
All in all, people who listen to FOX news need to stop and re-think their definition of terrorism when it comes to the Israeli-Palestinian conflict because the numbers and facts speak for themselves, and not the unsupported claims made by FOX news on the matter.
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ReplyDeleteYou've provided an opposing viewpoint with an aggressive tone, but a bit heavy-handed and blunt.
ReplyDeleteIt read not unlike a heavily biased piece, and utilized statistics more in support of the Palestinian cause.
Possible improvements include a sensationalized headline, a rationale, and maybe a more professional tone.
Oh, it was fine overall, don't cry hbb
Deletei think this is a very strong rewrite and portrays the hardships that palestine faces, this has been a clear demonstration of an opposing bias and was very well done. go palestine!!!!!
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